The thing is I like the story, the themes are there but it's so easy for the hero to walk away. There is wasn't anything to show how the relationship developed over time. Yes, they have plenty of sex, but there wasn't enough of a feeling of seeing them fall in love. You know the emotional grip, emotional journey - the bit where you think, awww....I hope these two make it. It was just that bit. I have the bits when they did fall in love and etc, but it was that development. So I think I've cracked it. I hope so.
We'll see. So hopefully, I'll have a different story to post when I next give an update.
Other things - changes to the daily blogging
I think it's a bit of overkill blogging nearly everyday. There are some features I like, others I just consider a bore. I may just keep the regulars and scrap the features unless I have something to say or may swap over. I'm current busy at work so haven't got the time to review but will do soon. I'll post a new schedule when I'm done.